Hey DrummerBabe, You have some really catchy lines here, interesting and character provoking. I can feel that you have a rhythm happening but a thought comes...
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word_of_mouth_ent
word_of_mout...
May 20, 2002 4:09 am
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Siniard, Randy C
r0ck3r_sw4mp
May 20, 2002 1:18 pm
I noticed that in Verse one and two you have an AABB rhyme pattern but in Verse 3 you have an ABAB rhyme pattern... Randy ... From: the_story_teller310...
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e2rod
May 20, 2002 4:38 pm
From a quick glance I see the lyric is riddled with cliches, let's see what else we find ... a ... writing ... too ... (wouldn't it make more sense if you said...
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e2rod
May 20, 2002 4:43 pm
NASHVILLE CLICHÉ COMMISSION ISSUES ANNUAL REPORT By Kevin Johnston Nashville Cliché Commission once again issues its guidelines for clichés, urging...
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revolaber_30
May 20, 2002 4:58 pm
Hiya Story. I like this one . I made a couple of suggestions for ya below. I don't know what medley you have for this so maybe my suggestions wont work. But...
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kelleyc000
May 20, 2002 5:24 pm
Hey James! Well, the song is about lessons to be learned, but the whole point of it is that in the end, he didn't learn the lessons that he was supposed to. I...
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John Harrison
john@...
May 20, 2002 6:06 pm
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kelleyc000
May 20, 2002 8:39 pm
Well, I really, really like this song. Like, really. Sometimes I think "cliches" are really good in a song. It sounds great, and it has awesome structure. ...
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kelleyc000
May 20, 2002 8:52 pm
Okay, I've been really mad about something going on in here for a while, and I'm going to let it out now. There is this extreme negativity going on by a...
1546
proaudiomusic
May 20, 2002 9:25 pm
Critiquing others and being critiqued A small % of people do critique. Remember, it's like tithing, the more you give the more you get back. I critique when I...
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DUBOISE1958@...
the_story_te...
May 20, 2002 10:31 pm
rod, i don't know you tell me, I'm just learning & you seem to be some what of a genius level, help is appreciated if you can do so without degrading my ...
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DUBOISE1958@...
the_story_te...
May 20, 2002 10:39 pm
i agree with you kel, we had the same prob in the old group @ delphi 's writing songs i don't care what i posted , i got a negative response , i guess we have...
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straycathop
May 20, 2002 11:17 pm
Hey Kelley, Thank you. I joined this group several months ago and at that time thought everyone was nice and had a lot of good input. I was gone for a month or...
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kelleyc000
May 20, 2002 11:22 pm
Yeah, I'm a woman too. I don't think it's so much that as it is certain people who have very negative and egotistical attitudes. I appreciate constructive...
Yes, degrading intellect is never a good thing to do... : ) I hope that in the future we can all be giving "good feeling" criticism... Love, Kelley ... some...
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revolaber_30
May 21, 2002 1:19 am
Ok the title makes perfect sense. :-)the "and" makes sense.:-) And I understand the rhyme scheme change. its just a "personal"; nit of mine. I do it alot and...
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Larry
lmofle
May 21, 2002 1:19 am
Excellent advice...I will definitely try to bear that in mind as I read a song. Usually I do not provide advice if something does not hit me soon after reading...
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Larry
lmofle
May 21, 2002 1:19 am
See, I am like Kelley...a cliché' is not all that bad if it still can evoke the emotion that you are trying to reach. I had a buddy of mine say you can write...
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Larry
lmofle
May 21, 2002 1:19 am
Erod...now this was funny!!! ... From: e2rod [mailto:e2rod@...] Sent: Monday, May 20, 2002 11:43 AM To: writing-songs@yahoogroups.com Subject:...
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revolaber_30
May 21, 2002 1:33 am
When I was in 7th grade and started writing songs all the information I could get(books videos etc.) said avoid cliches and try not to right about "love". I...
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mstoi@...
May 21, 2002 2:13 am
Just a thought... instead of repeating in the first verse "there" twice in order to make the rhyme work, just say It was dark You were there State of mind ...
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mstoi@...
May 21, 2002 2:28 am
Hey kelley, You go girl... I've noticed it too! I think some people think too high of themselves and like to put everyone else down because it makes them feel...
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mstoi@...
May 21, 2002 2:37 am
Hey kelley, Also, i think your songs are great - you have the potential to get far, and if this person (whoever it is) is making you feel bad, don't listen....
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richardrummery
May 21, 2002 5:44 am
Hi, I'm a songwriter from oz studying philosophy. I love to write in many styles-but I love rock/pop styles as they seem to offer more scope.Currently working...
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DUBOISE1958@...
the_story_te...
May 21, 2002 6:05 am
welcome richardrummery,hope you enjoy the group. the_story_teller310 [Non-text portions of this message have been removed]...
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kelvin falconer
karmajampa2000
May 21, 2002 6:43 am
Hello kelley, This has been a bit of a rough day for me because I am not sure that you are not referring to me, I think you are referring to Rod, but...
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Erin Downey
rapinka
May 21, 2002 12:10 pm
Taking the last line "not all there" out of context and exchanging it with "everywhere" would work, as I said, out of context, and in theory. But seeing as the...
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Siniard, Randy C
r0ck3r_sw4mp
May 21, 2002 12:55 pm
Alright I have to say this after reading what is being said. There is such a thing as negative constructive criticism; this list is not only for everyone to...
