Lorenz, I see your point, but i don't share how it occurs to you. In general I can rhyme a longing for home with anxiety; not being able to sit tight in your ...
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Visser, Peter
pjeut
Jun 1, 2006 8:34 am
How 'bout: I had to smile as I reached up and re-arranged your hair. Though english isn't my primary language, I guess the picture of "re-arranging" rhymes...
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Visser, Peter
pjeut
Jun 1, 2006 8:49 am
Alan, Do we really wanna know what you're doing in the mirror? LOVVVVVL. Sorry, couldn't resist that 1. Pjeut from Holland. ... Van: Alan...
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deshawn1020
Jun 1, 2006 10:15 am
Hi All: Come and check out my new tunes at http://www.mp3unsigned.com/deShawn.ASP and if you like them please leave me a message. I'm on instant messenger @...
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writing-songs@yahoogr...
Jun 1, 2006 2:46 pm
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Alan
hoopster3259
Jun 1, 2006 3:25 pm
Lorenz, I don't mind the grief . . . keep it coming. I see your points and will continue to search for exactly the right solution. :-) Alan ... is the best...
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Alan
hoopster3259
Jun 1, 2006 3:31 pm
Yeah, yeah. That works too. You guys will help me get it right yet. Thanks, Peter. Alan ... song ... is the ... that it was ... least ... gonna be ... luck. ...
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Alan
hoopster3259
Jun 1, 2006 3:34 pm
My point exactly! ;-) ... love. ... http://dcmusicstore.com ... and more ... information ... gemeente Noordoostpolder van toepassing, die vermeld staat op ...
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juanita ford
supermunchkin2
Jun 1, 2006 3:38 pm
WILL YOU MARRY ME Verse1 As I hold your hand in mine There's a question that's on my mind If I promise to love you for rest of my life Leave things like anger...
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gwenni63
Jun 1, 2006 4:23 pm
Hi all, I have already gotten feedback from the group for my lyric "On Golden Wings". I've since worked with a collaborator and would like to post it to the...
22016
Alan
hoopster3259
Jun 1, 2006 4:50 pm
Juanita, There's a few places in here where you confuse me. First I'm not sure who is singing it a guy or gal. Also, is there a typo in this sentence? "No...
22017
Alan
hoopster3259
Jun 1, 2006 4:56 pm
You should be able to upload it in the "Files" option on the left side of the screen. * Home * Messages * Post * Chat * Files <-------- This option * Photos...
22018
Juanita Ford
supermunchkin2
Jun 1, 2006 5:03 pm
its a man asking a woman to marry him wrote it one o clock this morning juanita ... From: Alan To: writing-songs@yahoogroups.com Sent: Thursday, June 01, 2006...
22019
Juanita Ford
supermunchkin2
Jun 1, 2006 5:33 pm
WILL YOU MARRY ME Verse1 As I hold your hand in mine There's a question that's on my mind If I promise to love you for rest of my life Leave things like anger...
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Alan
hoopster3259
Jun 1, 2006 5:56 pm
Juanita, I like how this one starts. The first three lines are a good lead-in to the song but for me the fourth takes away from it. Let me think . . . what...
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Jocelyn
jocelyn1600
Jun 1, 2006 5:59 pm
The June E-zine Has Been Published http://GodsAmazingLove.net Real Men Love Jesus A Promise To A Jew by Tim Tidwell Let the Lord Choose Your Career Calling A...
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pjeut
Jun 1, 2006 6:05 pm
I meaned "just-before-out-of-bed-hair-do", of course. ... do". ... a song ... is the ... (while ... seems ... just ... that it was ... awkward....at least ... ...
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pjeut
Jun 1, 2006 6:20 pm
Well, here it is. My first song to publish at this group. It doesn't have a real chorus and verses. It's due to the music. I usually write the music first, and...
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Juanita Ford
supermunchkin2
Jun 1, 2006 6:32 pm
thats simply beatiful you have a lot of talent juanita ... From: pjeut To: writing-songs@yahoogroups.com Sent: Thursday, June 01, 2006 2:16 PM Subject:...
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Juanita Ford
supermunchkin2
Jun 1, 2006 6:35 pm
here another rewrite WILL YOU MARRY ME Verse1 As I hold your hand in mine There's a question that's on my mind Will you become my bride? Will you be there at...
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Juanita Ford
supermunchkin2
Jun 1, 2006 6:36 pm
thank you thats much better juanita ... From: Alan To: writing-songs@yahoogroups.com Sent: Thursday, June 01, 2006 1:55 PM Subject: [writing-songs] Re: new...
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pjeut
Jun 1, 2006 6:40 pm
Thanks, juanita. It came a little late though, I'm 43 already. My prime interest lies with the music though. I have recorded this tune and send it to a...
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Juanita Ford
supermunchkin2
Jun 1, 2006 7:04 pm
its never to late for the things you love juanita ... From: pjeut To: writing-songs@yahoogroups.com Sent: Thursday, June 01, 2006 2:38 PM Subject:...
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Alan
hoopster3259
Jun 1, 2006 7:31 pm
Peter, I'm glad you got a chance to post here. You've got a lot of cool lines in here. There are a few that I think perhaps are a bit confusing to me/us but...
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Lorenz
eliezerwolf27
Jun 1, 2006 7:35 pm
Pjeut- There are some good lines here (" witnessing scars that are scratched on our souls") BUT there seem to be some problems w/ your use of the English...
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Alan
hoopster3259
Jun 1, 2006 7:35 pm
Juanita, I was suggesting those two lines to replace just the one line not both, but if it works for you . . . cool. Also, does it make more sense if you do...
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Juanita Ford
supermunchkin2
Jun 1, 2006 7:47 pm
thank you juanita ... From: Alan To: writing-songs@yahoogroups.com Sent: Thursday, June 01, 2006 3:34 PM Subject: [writing-songs] Re: new song will you marry...
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Juanita Ford
supermunchkin2
Jun 1, 2006 7:50 pm
fixed it thanks for yiur help juanita WILL YOU MARRY ME Verse1 As I hold your hand in mine There's a question that's on my mind Will you be there at my side? ...
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paulerothlove
Jun 1, 2006 11:28 pm
For the second and third lines I like "Will you be my bride, Will you be there at my side"....
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Chris Flavien
caflavien
Jun 2, 2006 12:09 am
Yo deshawn Love the tunes especially the instrumential "Thinkin' 'bout U. Had my head bopping. Got me wanna write some lyrics to it. Hot man, real hot. I...
