Hi Steve, I'm a little worried that there are one too many topics in this song :( but I suppose love, hopes and dreams seem to go hand in hand. I already see...
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Keith Hale
iwordsmithy
Jan 1, 2009 10:28 pm
Hi Cheryl, As you know already, I like a lot of what you write, but I'm not really feeling this one as much as usual. It doesn't seem to flow as well, or to be...
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Cheryl Moon
cmoon0119
Jan 2, 2009 3:44 pm
Thank you Keith, ... been trying to avoid verses that are written in 'box' form - the first verse seemed to write itself - at that point I had no idea where...
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Cheryl Moon
cmoon0119
Jan 2, 2009 4:18 pm
I'm glad this group doesn't object to posting works in progress :) hopefully this has a bit more focus - please feel free to nit pick it - all input is helpful...
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Maddie McGann
mm.horses
Jan 2, 2009 4:43 pm
i really like it, and its so true. But do you have a tune yet? because if you just sing it out loud to yourself, then you will probably find a few spots...
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Cheryl Moon
cmoon0119
Jan 2, 2009 7:51 pm
thanks a bunch Maddie, I'm working on that - my children don't like it LOL but I try ;) Cheryl ... yourself, ... words around will make a huge...
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DUSTYTRAILS4ME@...
revenge_4_dusty
Jan 3, 2009 5:38 pm
I choose to let you rant on about your lack of expertise in Songwriting, than for me to try to justify my statements to you.....The songs I have written stand...
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J Tay
j.tay98
Jan 3, 2009 5:38 pm
I like the first verse ________________________________ From: Cheryl Moon <cmoon0119@...> To: writing-songs@yahoogroups.com Sent: Wednesday, December 31,...
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Skye Croft
skyecroft
Jan 3, 2009 5:39 pm
is this the hole song how old r u ________________________________ From: joanna mcdonald <mcdonald.joanna@...> To: writing-songs@yahoogroups.com ...
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Skye Croft
skyecroft
Jan 3, 2009 5:39 pm
how old do u think i`m in real life ________________________________ From: joanna mcdonald <mcdonald.joanna@...> To: writing-songs@yahoogroups.com Sent:...
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IamDave
proaudiomusic
Jan 3, 2009 5:41 pm
Can we ... stop firing shots at each other. There's a few people apparently not wild about each other which isn't to uncommon on a group so maybe it's best...
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Steve Cooke
shriekgadget
Jan 3, 2009 6:08 pm
... I'm not sure that there are any rules, Keith. If it works, it works. I imagine that if Donna Summer had posted the lyric to 'I Feel Love' on this list...
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Cheryl Moon
cmoon0119
Jan 5, 2009 3:04 pm
I usually don't post my gospel songs here, but I hope you don't mind my posting this one for critique. Comments, nits and crits are appreciated. :D Cheryl ...
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Tom Solanto
onenoteup
Jan 6, 2009 2:49 pm
Picture Him http://www.soundclick.com/util/getplayer.m3u?id=7211102&q=lo http://www.soundclick.com/util/getplayer.m3u?id=7211102&q=hi Evil's alive Eating my...
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comicmans1
Jan 7, 2009 5:41 am
Feliciatations to All My Fellow Songwriters throughout the U.S. and around the World!!! What's up everybody! I'd like to take to chance to wish everybody a...
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Keith Hale
iwordsmithy
Jan 7, 2009 8:15 am
Hi There, This synth has to be seen to be believed. This is heaven for a geek like me, LOL ! It looks like it came from another planet. I think I'm going to...
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Steve Cooke
shriekgadget
Jan 7, 2009 8:28 am
More of a gimmick than a useful synth, I suspect. You'd need a way of saving patches or else there'd be trouble if the table got disrupted. The Roland...
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J Tay
j.tay98
Jan 8, 2009 6:24 pm
I like the second verse , I believe in staying with the same rhyming pattern throughout the verses , such as ABAB , or whatever you choose-Jim ...
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J Tay
j.tay98
Jan 8, 2009 6:24 pm
I like the last two lines of the first verse -j ________________________________ From: Cheryl Moon <cmoon0119@...> To: writing-songs@yahoogroups.com ...
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DUSTYTRAILS4ME@...
revenge_4_dusty
Jan 8, 2009 6:24 pm
Cheryl....very good lyrics....but, I am wondering if you will be adding a chorus? If not....no problem....however....you might wish to then (in that ...
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Mike Halas
mike.halas
Jan 8, 2009 6:25 pm
Tom --I dont respond often to lyrics i see posted unless they strike a chord in me Yours here have done just that ________________________________ From: Tom...
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da_breeze24
Jan 8, 2009 6:25 pm
I like it alot. Just out of curiosity, how many times have you rewritten it?...
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Cheryl Moon
cmoon0119
Jan 8, 2009 8:19 pm
Thanks da-breeze glad you like it, hmmm... tweaks - quite a few :D but I think this one has gone through 3 major rewrites, including this one, because I...
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Cheryl Moon
cmoon0119
Jan 8, 2009 10:42 pm
Thanks J ... This software can help you create music accompaniment very quickly and easily. ... http://dcmusicstore.com is the sole supporter of the CSO and ...
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Cheryl Moon
cmoon0119
Jan 8, 2009 10:51 pm
Thank you Dusty, I may consider it, but I was going with VVBV Someone suggested a Celtic Woman type sound I had a 'O Brother Where Art Thou' thing in my head...
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Cheryl Moon
cmoon0119
Jan 8, 2009 11:26 pm
Thanks J, I know it appears to be AAAA in verse 1 but couldn't it be interpreted as AABB just as easily? Seems that happens alot when the end rhymes just so...
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Steve Cooke
shriekgadget
Jan 8, 2009 11:39 pm
... That seems a strange to "believe in". If a song works, it works. -- Steve Cooke smcooke@... www.facebook.com/people/Steve_Cooke/691988218...
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prashant ingole
spoton7
Jan 9, 2009 6:40 pm
Hi Cheryl, I keep on seeing your name almost everytime on this group. I appreciate the way you think and write. My observation on this song is the verse2 till...
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Cheryl Moon
cmoon0119
Jan 9, 2009 8:33 pm
Hello Pashant, That was a very nice compliment to my writing in general. Much appreciated. :D I like your suggestion of 'height' regarding victory and it will...
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Tom Solanto
onenoteup
Jan 10, 2009 8:37 pm
Thank you Mike, that was nice of you to say that ... From: Mike Halas <mike.halas@...> Subject: Re: [writing-songs] Picture Him To:...
