Emily--i'm Mike and i went to your myspace. Couldnt find your demo but i read the lyrics to "Violence of Man" I like your energy--your ability to use your...
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normtaulbee
Mar 4, 2009 6:19 pm
Father time oh Father time forgive me for this crime drugs have surely darkened every corner of my mind These puncture marks and scars show the places I have...
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Kent Kingery
kentkingery
Mar 11, 2009 4:40 pm
... Wow! Some powerful images here. Would love to hear the music. One minor issue is that you want the word "veil" here... Kent...
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gwenni63
Mar 14, 2009 2:42 pm
Hi Group, Here's a new lyric that I am writing for a 19-year-old Swedish singer. CAN WE...? copr. March 14, 2009@8:30am by Gwendolyn French I was surprised ...
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Richard
king_6120
Mar 14, 2009 8:40 pm
THE DEVIL AND THE DEEP BLUE SEA (Chorus) I'm damned if I do, damned if I don't this is a hell of a place to be no matter where I turn, I'm going to be between...
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Media Production
musica5699
Mar 14, 2009 8:41 pm
Los Angeles-based recording studio/production company is looking for low budget graphic artist and or interns who are good with Photo shop for assisting in...
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Charles
fisherman442...
Mar 14, 2009 8:49 pm
you know if you take out the cause words it would not be a bad song ... From: Richard To: writing-songs@yahoogroups.com Sent: Friday, March 13, 2009 7:10 AM ...
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Steve Cooke
shriekgadget
Mar 14, 2009 8:53 pm
Sorry to be critical, but it feels a bit like you've just amalgamated a bunch of clichés from different songs and stuffed them all into this one. If that...
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Charles
fisherman442...
Mar 14, 2009 8:56 pm
try this this way darn if I do and darn if I don't this is a heck of a place to be no matter where I turn I'm going to be between the devil and the deep blue...
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Steve Cooke
shriekgadget
Mar 14, 2009 9:05 pm
I thought when you originally posted about taking out the "cause words" you meant where Richard had written 'cause' instead of 'because'. But now I see you...
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lee4jkee
Mar 15, 2009 7:57 pm
I,like it, it is a true statment and to keep it real you really dident say a lot of bad words they were not to bad .at all really people say those words every...
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slr@...
snootstrip
Mar 15, 2009 11:50 pm
Well done! -- "It is inevitable that some defeat will enter even the most victorious life. The human spirit is never finished when it is defeated... it is...
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Richard
king_6120
Mar 15, 2009 11:50 pm
hey thanks for all the feedback! i usually dont get any help here at all but this time i am glad i asked for feedback... mid you i am still set in my ways and...
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avb2u@...
avb2u...
Mar 15, 2009 11:50 pm
"Shower Singing" I'm down to my last bar of soap I'm down to my last bar of soap and when it gets so small that I can't see it all it's then that my life will...
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Steve Cooke
shriekgadget
Mar 16, 2009 12:05 am
... Well, for all the criticisms I made, a good tune and a killer performance can often make the quality of a lyric irrelevant. I mean, many of the biggest...
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tjs334
Mar 16, 2009 7:19 am
Chorus: She use to love me I was the man in her life But now she don't want me Because of one night I made her unlove me I made her unlove me I made her unlove...
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jaamiiz
Mar 16, 2009 12:08 pm
Smart Idea for a song! Wow!  A lil reflective expansion of the theme can add flesh to the song. •The foolish resist all change, the wise stay in control of...
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Steve Cooke
shriekgadget
Mar 16, 2009 12:19 pm
Loudon Wainwright III had a song on his 1995 album, Grown Man, that he recorded while singing in the shower. Apparently, it was not just a matter of adding...
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scales.japin
Mar 16, 2009 2:23 pm
... I don't mean to be brash or insulting, but that sounds like a tune for the kid's when they are learning good bathing habits. It is actually quite catchy....
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scales.japin
Mar 16, 2009 2:23 pm
... It is alittle bland. some shanges in the verses could do some good, but over all it is not bad....
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scales.japin
Mar 16, 2009 2:23 pm
I am new here and I read all the e-mails that came to me and I would like to know how I would post one of my songs on the site so I can see what other writers...
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scales.japin
Mar 16, 2009 2:23 pm
Verse 1 Lately, I'm thinking, that I have been seeing things, I hear you and see you, I'm even smelling perfume. It can't be, cause your gone, walked out never...
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Japin Scales
scales.japin
Mar 16, 2009 2:23 pm
I like it, but I think that there sould be a little more to the song, but all in all, it works. Every one wants to trust someone, but few ever find that...
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Fernandez, Joyce Ann A.
joyce_16jo
Mar 16, 2009 2:23 pm
Hi! i'm a newbie here,, kind of feeling around..hehe,,,eniwei..i like the flow of your song, and the lines were smart...if i'd be betting, this song is rnb (am...
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Lorenz
eliezerwolf27
Mar 16, 2009 2:35 pm
Hello- I'm thinking this song is supposed to be a romantic lament to lost love but many of the images spoil the mood for me (flushing toilets, cold feet,...
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Lorenz
eliezerwolf27
Mar 16, 2009 2:42 pm
Hello- I'm hearing an R&B type song also (it puts me in mind of Lauren Hill's "I Used to Love Him" or Toni Braxton's "Unbreak My Heart"). I think the...
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Steve Cooke
shriekgadget
Mar 16, 2009 5:53 pm
You justcopy and paste the lyric onto an email like this one and then send it to the list using the same address you just used. If you're talking about more...
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niN9 iS miN9........
spoton7
Mar 18, 2009 5:30 pm
Hi Japin, Its a very good thought something new from my point of view (I may be wrong). However, The crispness is lost due to loads of filler & repeated words...
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Media Production
musica5699
Mar 18, 2009 5:31 pm
I was wondering if there are any people in here who are good with Photoshop and doing CD cover art? Rodger media_production@......
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Media Production
musica5699
Mar 18, 2009 5:32 pm
Good critique Lorenz----one thing is for certain on the plus side--the title and the suject matter is very good for a power ballad All great songs have more...
