Hi all, Am quite new to the group and new to this sorta thing ! was wondering where people are in the world ! i'm in Hull uk . Ruth xx...
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edisonmacarthur
May 5, 2012 9:26 pm
Stalking Betty White (Bulldozer Jones original song) Fictional song about Golden Girl Betty White. Free MP3: http://www.reverbnation.com/play_now/song_13138979...
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Desirea
sweetdesirea
May 17, 2012 11:29 pm
She needs something to really showcase her voice Sent from my iPhone ... [Non-text portions of this message have been removed]...
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Winters
wbrendakay
May 17, 2012 11:30 pm
And I have no one to help me promote my work. I could relly use some help. I live near Austin Texas....
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Dave
proaudiomusic
May 17, 2012 11:30 pm
Welcome. I'm in the USA. Dave Byers http://davebyersmusic.com...
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John Gavin
xxphydeauxx
May 17, 2012 11:55 pm
Seriously dude? Austin is like the Meca of new music. There are tons of venues and open mic type things. Lots of great but humble musicians that love to help...
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Jeremy Allard
uglybear58
May 19, 2012 9:37 pm
Hi Ruth, Welcome aboard - hope you find some good contacts. I am based in Hampshire UK Take care Jeremy Jeremy Allard PRS Registered Songwriter (LYRICIST) ...
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edisonmacarthur
May 28, 2012 2:29 pm
Fear the Talking Roaches (Bulldozer Jones) Watch video http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=r7gZJnrJw3o Free MP3: http://www.reverbnation.com/play_now/song_13374611 ...
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Dave
proaudiomusic
Jun 6, 2012 1:56 pm
Wow, that's tight. What the world is it about though? Seems like it should be a bit longer. Dave Byers www.davebyersmusic.com www.writingsongs.com ...
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Mike Thompson
edisonmacarthur
Jun 6, 2012 2:01 pm
This cockroach take over song was written to submit in a 30 second film contest. Thanks. ... -- Sent from my mobile device...
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Dave
proaudiomusic
Jun 6, 2012 2:04 pm
Good to get the 1st 50 out of the way. I know my 1st 50 were pretty skank. lol! The next 500 or so usually improve, at least that's been the plan. ;-) ...
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Paul Ladendorf
paulladendorf
Jun 6, 2012 3:30 pm
In general, I agree with Dave. Quality is much more important than quantity. I would much rather have one great song than 500 mediocre songs. I know really...
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edisonmacarthur
Jun 25, 2012 2:16 pm
Cat Song (mft1234 original comedy song) http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=WfsOOdZXLuM No this can't be mud oozing through my toes Feels so cold and slimy. Like a...
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Tim Beckwith
nineteenuk
Jun 25, 2012 9:34 pm
A quick link to soundcloud... To the end <http://soundcloud.com/tim-beckwith/to-the-end-2> thanks Tim [Non-text portions of this message have been removed]...
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sweetpeahiker
Jun 28, 2012 8:12 pm
Hi. I just joined tonight and look forward to reviewing and critiquing others' works here. It has been 12 years since I wrote my last song, until about two...
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sweetpeahiker
Jun 28, 2012 8:13 pm
LOL Cute! How about "My bride to be was so mortified she wouldn't marry me." I think it would just sound a little smoother. This reminds me of some drinking...
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sweetpeahiker
Jun 28, 2012 8:15 pm
Hi, Orlando. There is a big resemblance here to the song With Arms Wide Open from Creed. I would like to see more song structure added to this to make it...
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Paul Ladendorf
paulladendorf
Jul 3, 2012 5:29 pm
Hello, I think its good. The main criticism I have is that there is not enough imagery to "take me anywhere". I guess I wasn't really moved. Also I would like...
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Paul Ladendorf
paulladendorf
Jul 3, 2012 5:43 pm
This is a new age song so most won't be able to relate but I welcome and appreciate any constructive criticism nonetheless. Thanks for taking the time. Paul...
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J Tay
j.tay98
Jul 4, 2012 4:58 pm
Lots of inconsistant places for  rhymes First line ,third line , first line , third line, whatever ,  stay with the program , the chorus has it's own rhyme...
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sweetpeahiker
Jul 9, 2012 12:46 am
Hi, Paul. Thank you for your comments. I have rewritten the lyric to: V1: You have unfinished business Think it's fine to make me wait When you leave I'll say...
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sweetpeahiker
Jul 9, 2012 11:17 pm
Mostly focus on the bridge as I'm not sure how well it works, but if you would like to comment on the rest of it as well, I wouldn't mind hearing your...
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sweetpeahiker
Jul 9, 2012 11:22 pm
I agree. A nice rhyme scheme would definitely strengthen the verses. Also, the chorus could be stronger with closer rhyme and maybe have it tell a little more....
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Paul Ladendorf
paulladendorf
Jul 9, 2012 11:40 pm
Yea, its really a poem that needs to be turned into a song. The chorus was the last stanza. Â Paul Mellow Acoustic Singer-Songwriter ...
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jaylovee21
Jul 9, 2012 11:53 pm
Sent from my HTC EVO Design™ 4G from Boost Mobile ... From: "Tim Beckwith" <nineteenuk@...> To: <writing-songs@yahoogroups.com> Subject:...
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Paul Ladendorf
paulladendorf
Jul 9, 2012 11:55 pm
I like it! Took me on a little journey. I like the imagery. About the bridge: The questions are good for a little contrast but it would be nice to have a...
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Paul Ladendorf
paulladendorf
Jul 10, 2012 12:02 am
Another poem waiting to be turned into a lyric. Any feedback is appreciated. Soul to Soul Though beauty of the senses Is beautiful indeed Yet something so...
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sweetpeahiker
Jul 10, 2012 12:53 am
Hahahaha LOL Maybe ;-P (I take that the message in the song was effective). Can you please explain what you mean by a little more? In the bridge, verses,...
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sweetpeahiker
Jul 10, 2012 12:59 am
Sorry...forgot to add that I don't have music for it as of yet. I've been in the lyrical mood so they've been coming kinda fast and furious....
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sweetpeahiker
Jul 10, 2012 1:23 am
Hi, Paul. What lyrical structure do you normally use? Verse, Verse, Chorus, Verse, Chorus, Bridge, Chorus is usually end up doing but sometimes I change it a...
